Hello Everyone,
This is the work I was working on for writing this week. It is about police women and police men, the resone why I choose this topic was because most people say that women are not brave enough and not strong enough but women work just as hard as men do to get to where they need to be.
Never Judge Somebody!
Kia ora Ilaisaane.
ReplyDeleteI like that you have chosen such a strong topic to write on. There is always a lot of discussions about women's rights compared to men. I hope you will continue to talk about your opinions on this as that is the only way things will change. The more it is spoken about the better.
Your sentence on women getting the right to vote is a powerful argument that you could add a lot more detail and examples to, to give your argument more 'guts'. A great effort with persuasive writing and using paragraphs.
From Kylie in Room 1
Kia Ora Ilaisaane,
ReplyDeleteI like the way how you managed your presentation in each slide and saying what you're saying specifically. I like how you re-stated your opinion on the conclusion which is what we learnt right ?
I totally agree on your opinion because women should have the right to vote same as women should be treated the same way as police men. You spoke your words and your opinion, good job.
I really hope something changes once we continue doing our opinions on our topic right ? Keep up the fantastic work.
- Ema From Your Class.
Hi there, its Kohen. I really like your post. Maybe next time you could make some gaps in the middle so we can read it easier.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Ilaisaane,
ReplyDeleteIt's me Shriya from your class Rm11,
Great job on your persuasive writing. I do agree with you that police women should be treated as men police. Good job on writing this down. Your presentation is organized with slides which put your writing in order. Great Job
Hi Ilaisaane this is me Gunveen in your class. This is a very good introduction and I really like it.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora I really like your background and your photo. Maia
ReplyDeletekia ora Nane this is Tina from Room 9 I really like your
ReplyDeleteShould Police Women Be Treated The Same Way Police Men Are Treated
is so nice keep up the good work
by:Tina
Hi Nane.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy reading it and I really like the topic you choose.Mālie-Good job and keep up the great and nice work...